Ashley, as we discussed today, I look forward to reading a clearer statement of your thesis in the final essay. The brief version displayed today would be stronger if you clarified the types of “dramatic changes” to which you refer. This is the most important wording in your essay.
Also, one small but important point: clarify as precisely as possible when the “sexual revolution” began, according to historians or source materials (when does the phrase first appear in mass media, according to NYTimes full-text?), because historical periodization is crucial for your argument.
Ashley, as we discussed today, I look forward to reading a clearer statement of your thesis in the final essay. The brief version displayed today would be stronger if you clarified the types of “dramatic changes” to which you refer. This is the most important wording in your essay.
Also, one small but important point: clarify as precisely as possible when the “sexual revolution” began, according to historians or source materials (when does the phrase first appear in mass media, according to NYTimes full-text?), because historical periodization is crucial for your argument.